“But I Don’t”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there, and, if no one’s welcomed you to March yet, let me be the first!

It’s been a busy week in Shan-land so far…busy enough that I’m a little shocked that it’s only Wednesday! Today’s my first completely at-home day since Saturday, and I’m enjoying being able to do some hometending that’s not fitted hastily into the cracks between going hither and yon. I can’t say I enjoyed the dead mouse my daughter’s kitten gifted me with, but I’ll pretend that I’m grateful. =)

I think I’ve decided what TnT story to offer you (no, I’m not ignoring your comments on last week’s post, it’s just that my cup have runneth over a bit these last few weeks, and I keep meaning to get to them without actually, you know, getting to them…

The general consensus seems to be for sassy, so hopefully my selection is suitably sassy. I’m not sure how long I’ll stay with it, but it will be at least a month or two…maybe all four months of my creative marathon that begins in April and runs through the end of July. I do know I have several chapters, and sharing them with you will give me the chance to revise them, which means everyone benefits (even the readers over at fanfiction.net, who will get to enjoy the end results). I like it when everyone wins!

Now I think we’ve kept Ava waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes,  from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!


Ava reacted impulsively to her father’s salacious accusation about her and Donovan. And now, the aftermath…Ava has just declared that she has the right to live on her own terms….

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is March 1, 2017

  • I have one paragraph for you.

But I Don’t”

Maybe you do, Ava – but I don’t. This is my job, and my home. If he thinks we’re involved that way – not only will I not be able to take your case – I could end up with no cases, no home – and, worse yet, maybe even criminal charges.”

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Next week, we will reach the end of this scene – and, at least for now, this story.

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  1. Yep. Ava’s 12 if I remember correctly? Sort of on that cusp of adolescence and more-grown-up-ness but not quite being able to comprehend how far-reaching the consequences could be for something like that. And her father strikes me as the type that would want to go all the way with pulling all the legal action and whatever else he could.

  2. Oooh… I know and just knowing makes my heart break! I confess, I’m actually looking forward to some TnT fanfic (and though I know it’s hard to have more than one intense Vulcan in your head at a time, I sometimes miss your older TOS fanfics too). Basically, right now, I would like to set Ava aside into some kind of cryo where some kind of happy for now (if not a happily ever after) could be contrived. Some safe hide-a-way that would be too secretive for her father to find her…

  3. I’m with Debbie, I can definitely see her father running off with his and causing problems.

  4. I wouldn’t put it past Ava’s father to be heartless enough to take action, but maybe Ava can fix it (him).
    Sassy won out! Yay! 🙂

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