“I Believe You”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

Hi there!

Last week, I detailed several personal current events. This week has been calmer and more internal, with the exception of a very brief couples’ workout, the homeschool teen pizza party Lise and I attended, and getting to see George Takei’s Allegiance with my 15 year old son, then spend the afternoon and evening with him. He’s an amazing goofy big kid and young man in one six-foot-plus package, is my Boyo!

In other news:

  • The Far Shore, my sixth Kifo Island novel, is now a completed rough draft! WAHOO!

  • I’m still in the midst of some serious hometending.

  • I’m also plotting, writing a daily TnT drabble, and working on a substantial revision of my TnT origins story, “On Any Tuesday Night.” I’m doing this via Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class, and I’m learning entirely new ways to view and progress through the revision process. If you’re looking for a comprehensive and effective process for revisions, and you can afford an investment, this class might be worth a closer examination. =)

Oh – and about that white stuff in our yard? It’s mostly gone, leaving some tantalizing hints of greening in the grass. Now my epiphanies are piled up higher than the drifts!

As I mentioned last week, we’re getting close to the end of this scene, and then I’ll be moving on to something else to avoid entering the Spoiler Zone. I wasn’t sure what to share next, but the consensus from those who expressed an opinion is that some TnT fan fiction would be welcome, particularly if it’s serialized, so folks can look forward to a new segment each week. Since that’s also easier for me to set up ahead of time, and my Creative Marathon months (April-July) are fast approaching, that’s a definite advantage.

So Trip and T’Pol it is…but that still covers a lot of fictional ground, which leads to my next question:

What mood are you in the mood for?

I’ve got sweet stuff, sassy stuff, romantic stuff, angsty stuff, tragic stuff, happy stuff, and some that’s a blend of some or all of this stuff. I’ve also got crossovers that have a much older T’Pol, an inexplicable Trip, and Spock and family.

Opinions would help me narrow the scope of this decision, since I aim to please! Drop any suggestions or wish lists you have into the box below, and make your vote count!

Now I think we’ve kept Ava  waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes,  from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel  class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!


Ava’s father made a salacious accusation about her and Donovan, and she reacted impulsively.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is February 22, 2017

  • I used the 2’s (2/22) for six sentences.

I Believe You”

He took hold of her hand, and moved it from his arm gently but firmly. “I believe you – but I’m not sure that’s going to help. No father could let that go, Ava, if there’s even the slightest chance it might be true. And yours – he doesn’t seem predisposed to calmness.”

I just wanted to shock him, show him that I deserve to be left alone, that I’ve got the right to live my own way -”

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Next week, we may get more answers…or more questions. =)

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  1. I can see both their POVs here. I know exactly why Ava did what she did, but unless Ava’s father surprises us all beyond measure, I think Donovan is right in that he’s not going to take it well. Even if he does believe Ava that what she said wasn’t true, I can see him then being pissed at her for lying to him.

  2. I suppose Donovan’s right, up to a point – a father couldn’t let something like that go – but I’m not entirely (in fact, not at all) convinced Ava’s father’s concern is for her safety.
    And T’Pol and Trip: any and all, but sassy sounds fun! 🙂

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