“To Sleep for Real”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Well, here we are, at the penultimate WIPpet of 2016. It’s quiet here; I just realized I forgot to get candles for the menorah. We’re not Jewish, but some dear friends are, and we bought the menorah a few years back, when we celebrated part of Hanukkah with them. I was sorting Christmas ornaments last week, and Lise asked if we could light it. So, I need to get the candles, so that we can.

Otherwise, it’ll be a simple day. Finances are very lean, at the moment, so we need to be careful what we spend – but time, love, and attention don’t cost money.

And you? What does your holiday season hold?

Whatever it is, may you revel in it!

We’re back to Ava Garcia in Sea Changes

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening, at the moment. Post NaNo, I expect to pick up steam for the next few months.)

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!


While Donovan is helping Ava in the aftermath of a nosebleed, her computer signaled an incoming call, and he offered to answer for her.


WIPpet Math:

  • Today is December 21, 2016

  • I‘ve got 6 mostly shrt paragraphs today, 12/21, by adding the digits (1+2+2+1=6).

To Sleep For Real

Ava had programmed the device to differing tones when she was eight. That was the year that she’d learned that she could fake illnesses and get out of school. Her parents, already ‘far too busy’ with their own business to concern themselves with staying home to care for her, would leave her home alone, and call throughout the day to check on her. Ava chose to ignore most of those calls, feigning sleep –

“Too tired to chew ice,” Ava murmured. All she wanted now was to sleep for real. “Too tired even to sip anymore. Just want to sleep.”

“All right.” His voice was soft. “Rest. I’ll have some ice ready for you when you wake up, if you want it then.”

But resting wasn’t going to happen until she talked to them. The tone sounded again and again, and, each time, it jolted Ava awake.

“Damn them,” she swore, after the third time. “Won’t even let me be here. Can’t run far enough….”

“I can turn it down, or off.”

Who’s calling?

Why doesn’t Ava want to talk to the caller?

What’s next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more…

Want more WIPpets? Click the button below, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined!

I know it has nothing to do with the story – but I think Ava might enjoy this if she were feeling better – so I’ll share it with you! =D


  1. This has a hint of supernatural feel to it, as if those calls mean far more than people wishing to talk to her. I probably shouldn’t ‘think aloud’… 😉

    • I love when people "think aloud."
      Of course, I’m not giving anything away, but Wednesday is almost here….

  2. aw, Ava. I know I hate when people keep calling(thankfully, most know I hate talking on the phone 😉 ) Glad Donovan is there for her.

    • I’m glad he is, too. I don’t have a land line anymore, and very few people know my cell number. I like it that way!

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