“A Lifetime Ago:” Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt. 

I didn’t make it here last week. It was a crazy-busy week of taking two kids in opposite directions on separate days, then picking them up again – oh, and one of them involved two 300 mile round trips.

In the spaces between, I was planning and plotting and writing and hometending and spending time with my Accomplice and falling in love with Hamilton and and and…

Now A Rising Tide, the fourth of my Kifo Island novels, has been drafted. The Far Shore, which will be next, is now in the final stages of plotting – I hope to be drafting it by the weekend.

In the meantime, I’ve been doing something that probably won’t surprise anyone who’s been here more than a time or two….

I’ve been playing with Trip and T’Pol. And I’m toying with an idea for next month, to go along with my CampNaNoWriMo writing – and maybe give me a jumping-off point for a September project.

Right now, though, it’s time to rejoin Donovan Nash and Ava Garcia in Sea Changes.

Donovan is one of my favorite Kifo Island characters. He had a major supporting role in both of my previously drafted Kifo stories. Now, he gets his own (well, shared with Karina and Ava, but still, he’s finally the star he was always meant to be!)

The premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?


This passage is NaNo rough. My plan is to begin creating a revision plan within the next few months, when all 24 scenes have passed through my local crit group. That’s moving slowly, as I’ll be focused more on new writing than revision until August.

That said, any input is gratefully accepted!

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is June 22, 2016
  • I‘ve got 4 sentences today (2+2=4).

Ava has wryly mentioned that Donovan may need longer to read her medical records than she’ll live.

A Lifetime Ago

“Luckily, I’m a fast reader,” Donovan reassured her, and was rewarded with a faint smile. “And I’m pretty much limited to indoors pursuits during the middle of the day – if that’s a problem for you, we can find you someone else to cover those hours, so you won’t be limited by my limitations.”

“Heat and sun wear me out these days,” she said, and her voice sounded tired and a little defeated. “I used to love the summers – I grew up on the coast in Massachusetts, and summers were glorious – I had actual time to do things I wanted, and energy left for them once all the enrichment activities my folks insisted on were done – but that seems like a lifetime ago, now…”

Will Donovan and Ava decide to work together?

What will her records reveal?

What’s next?

Some of these questions may be answered – and others will certainly be posed- next week, so be sure to come back then to learn more of Donovan’s story.

To read Donovan’s scene in its entirety, just follow the links:

And now, a friendly reminder:

If you’re enjoying my Kifo Island posts, and would like to see the evolution of two upcoming novels, The Far Shore and Tsunamis, I’ll soon be posting an index for my Story a Day May 2016 vignettes (OK, maybe soon is a relative term. Maybe we should go with ‘eventually’ instead….

Want more WIPpets? You can find them, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined, by following the little blue froggy from WIPpet to WIPpet to WIPpet!

Because sometimes you just need a little Vulcan Rubdown (saucy and possibly NSFW)



  1. I like how Ava sounds mature beyond her years here. Not too grownup, but definitely tinged with a melancholy that you would hope a girl her age wouldn’t have to have experienced yet.

    • Ava was always rather a serious, mature girl – as the only child and the focus of both her parents’ frustrations and hopes, I think it’s partly a survival mechanism on her part.

      I’ve also noticed that serious illness tends to bring out a certain maturity and depth – in children or adults.

      And then, there’s the fact that many children are capable of being considerably more mature than many adults give them credit for. I live with two of those, myself, and the younger will be twelve in a couple of weeks…and, yes, she can at times seem mature well beyond what the years she’s lived suggest.

    • Ava knows making everything right isn’t a possibility. All she wants now is to just get to live while she can. It’s not ideal, but maybe it will be enough.

      She likes gentle hugs, though. (Ava)

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