Sharper Than the Air: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all, or pick a few like leftover holiday memories….

If you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

It’s only Wednesday, but I’m in the mood to get things wrapped up as I can, because I’ll soon be diving into a sea of drafting and plotting, and those can be consuming…

So here I am, on a Wednesday, setting up a post that won’t be seen until the weekend. That’s lovely chaos, in action! Let’s pretend it’s Saturday morning rather than the wee small hours of Wednesday, though, so I can share my snippet!

This week, that’s the next passage from “A Splash of Red,”  which I’m serializing here. This surreal fantasy story is the child of my own life and dreams, with a generous dollop of imagery and a big dash of creative license…

More on the story after the eight-sentence snippet.

Context, such as it is…A woman is attempting to win the trust of a little girl in a red dress, while hawks wheel above. The child doesn’t place her confidence naively; it will have to be earned.

Given the surrealism of the story, punctuation is a bit creative, so be warned!

Sharper Than the Air

I want her to trust me, but I must wait. I can’t force her. No words can sway her – she needs to feel it, know it, for herself.

“Do you have children?” The question is sharper than the air, than the suddenness of a backhand slap across the face, an accusation. Above, the hawks drop nearer, their circling tighter.

Why does the child want to know?

Why does the woman feel such impact from it?

What do the hawks intend?

Next week may bring answers – and certainly more questions!

Previous “A Splash of Red” snippets:

Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review, which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

I’d love any and all input and criticism you’re inclined to offer. Until then, may your week be delightful! =D

Through the end of May, you can read my short story “Monday Morning Coffee,” which appears in the 2015 World Unknown Review, at L.S. Engler. Soon, you’ll also find my author interview, with lots of juicy details about the creation of this story!

Want more #8Sunday?


    • Yes, Ed, we’re getting closer to the end, now. Things will move at a bit of a faster clip, and maybe be just a bit less surreal, from here on out…

      …Or will they? =)

  1. I would love to sign up and join. Will check out the link. What caught my eye is I have an old Dick Cavett show on and Paul Simon at a young age is being interviewed. Irony and synchronicity. Debbie

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