Whispering Strangles: #WeWriWa #8Sunday

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors’ Eight Sentence Sunday!

It’s the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! We’ve got a variety of genres and talented writers just waiting for you to come sample their wordy wares. Come read one, or all, or pick a few like leftover holiday memories….

And, if you’re inclined to share your own 8-10 sentence snippet, follow the link and sign up. It’s a great community to be a part of! =D

I was away last week, busily finishing up a short story for a contest deadline. I’m happy with the results, and might even have good news to share in June. But that was last week; this week, I offer you the next eight sentences of A Splash of Red”, a surreal fantasy story, the child of my own life and dreams, with a generous dollop of imagery and a big dash of creative license…

More on the story after the snippet.

Context, such as it is…A woman is attempting to win the trust of a little girl in a red dress, while hawks wheel above…but just who are these two to one another? And what about those hawks?

When we left our woman and child two weeks back, the little girl had vanished into the woods, and the woman is realizing her power and the child’s vulnerability, and her belief that she was responsible for the hawks’ attacks….

Given the surrealism of the story, punctuation is a bit creative, so be warned!

Whispering Strangles

I know better now. I remember my t’ai chi practice. Yes.

I drop my fist, relax my stance. Not resistance.


Flowing, I run, seeking a splash of red and long golden hair.

A new whispering strangles the air, and a heavy, crushing shadow dives down into the trees – it cries out with Mother’s voice, layered over those who had screamed at her. Her screams are tearing pain, beaks and talons stripping my blooded carcass…stripping me…stripping the little girl I was of meat and life –

Previous “A Splash of Red” snippets:

 Come back next week for another installment!

Did you like what you read? “A Splash of Red” was originally published in the 2014 inaugural edition of World Unknown Review,  which is edited by L.S. Engler. Since I retain all rights beyond first publication, I intend to revise the story and use it as my own initial self-publishing experiment.

That being said, I’d love any and all input and criticism you’re inclined to offer!

Want more #8Sunday?


    • Hawks were an important part of her childhood. And yes, there was serious darkness, which, because I don’t believe in repeating that pattern, she’s trying hard to turn into something beautiful…

      I may or may not have more than a passing familiarity with this character, the little girl, and their story…which makes me glad that you like them.

    • “Brush strokes and shadows and hints.”

      I love this. That’s what this story has always felt like to me. I’m happy you want more, because more is on the way this week, and for at least a few more to come.

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